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	<title>Comments on: Can you Pleeease critique my Cover Letter?. Please.I need a job?</title>
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		<title>By: Sidwell</title>
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		<dc:creator>Sidwell</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Thu, 28 Jan 2010 14:14:09 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>It sounds too much like advertising. You need to make it more personal to you. Also NO contractions. That is too casual. I have done some editing to make it read better. 
DO NOT mention what you did at university if you graduated more than 5 years ago. If you graduated in the last 5 years then leave it in. 


I am writing to express my interest in the position of  XXXXXX . 

My skills include quick and creative thinking, critical decision making and multi-tasking capabilities. I am a firm believer in accountability, strong work ethics, and client satisfaction. 

My coursework at Fairleigh Dickinson University and experience in the retail industry has helped me to develop a keen interest in the marketing and client relations fields. 

In previous positions I have used signage, marketing campaigns, market research, as well as client and employee relationships skills to learn what is and what is not appropriate in customer relations. 

I am also experienced with meeting sales deadlines and obtaining target objectives through my retail management and telephone marketing experience. 

Direct interaction with consumers and clients has allowed me to quickly and effectively resolve client issues and complaints. 

In addition, I&#039;ve been fortunate to have had the experience of representing several of some of the most successful companies by means of field promotional marketing. These new innovative marketing strategies meant that I was in direct contact with clients and with potential new clients. 

Please find enclosed my resume for your review. I look forward to the opportunity to meet with you to further discuss my background and desire to work for XXXXXX. 

Please feel free to contact me via phone (XXX*XXX*XXXX) or via email at 
Thank you for your time and consideration. 
Derick Robinson</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>It sounds too much like advertising. You need to make it more personal to you. Also NO contractions. That is too casual. I have done some editing to make it read better.<br />
DO NOT mention what you did at university if you graduated more than 5 years ago. If you graduated in the last 5 years then leave it in. </p>
<p>I am writing to express my interest in the position of  XXXXXX . </p>
<p>My skills include quick and creative thinking, critical decision making and multi-tasking capabilities. I am a firm believer in accountability, strong work ethics, and client satisfaction. </p>
<p>My coursework at Fairleigh Dickinson University and experience in the retail industry has helped me to develop a keen interest in the marketing and client relations fields. </p>
<p>In previous positions I have used signage, marketing campaigns, market research, as well as client and employee relationships skills to learn what is and what is not appropriate in customer relations. </p>
<p>I am also experienced with meeting sales deadlines and obtaining target objectives through my retail management and telephone marketing experience. </p>
<p>Direct interaction with consumers and clients has allowed me to quickly and effectively resolve client issues and complaints. </p>
<p>In addition, I&#8217;ve been fortunate to have had the experience of representing several of some of the most successful companies by means of field promotional marketing. These new innovative marketing strategies meant that I was in direct contact with clients and with potential new clients. </p>
<p>Please find enclosed my resume for your review. I look forward to the opportunity to meet with you to further discuss my background and desire to work for XXXXXX. </p>
<p>Please feel free to contact me via phone (XXX*XXX*XXXX) or via email at<br />
Thank you for your time and consideration.<br />
Derick Robinson</p>
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		<title>By: Jody M</title>
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		<dc:creator>Jody M</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 26 Jan 2010 02:12:42 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>I believe you should always use &#039;I am&#039; instead of I&#039;m.  also - I have - not I&#039;ve.  Your second paragraph is too lengthy, wordy.  When I was reading it, I was getting lost in some areas...   &quot;I&#039;ve been fortunate to have had the experience of representing SEVERAL OF SOME OF THE MOST...&quot;

You sound very qualified however, good luck in your job searching.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>I believe you should always use &#8216;I am&#8217; instead of I&#8217;m.  also &#8211; I have &#8211; not I&#8217;ve.  Your second paragraph is too lengthy, wordy.  When I was reading it, I was getting lost in some areas&#8230;   &#8220;I&#8217;ve been fortunate to have had the experience of representing SEVERAL OF SOME OF THE MOST&#8230;&#8221;</p>
<p>You sound very qualified however, good luck in your job searching.</p>
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		<title>By: TAT</title>
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		<dc:creator>TAT</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Mon, 25 Jan 2010 01:32:39 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>it is too long. Condense a little.  Say the same thing with fewer words.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>it is too long. Condense a little.  Say the same thing with fewer words.</p>
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		<title>By: Job Hunt Master</title>
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		<dc:creator>Job Hunt Master</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Sun, 24 Jan 2010 13:47:50 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Hi

Good stuff in there however IMHO its far too long- needs to be punchier.  For a great guide to really effective cover letters, visit

Good luck!</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Hi</p>
<p>Good stuff in there however IMHO its far too long- needs to be punchier.  For a great guide to really effective cover letters, visit</p>
<p>Good luck!</p>
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