Can you Pleeease critique my Cover Letter?. Please.I need a job?
I am in search of a career in Public Relations or Client Service and maintenace…. Is this cover letter going to get me that job…. also if anyone live in the NYC or North Jersey area and can assist with getting me a job… Wow… I would greatly appreciate… here it is
I’m writing to express interest and apply for the XXXXXX position. After reviewing the requirements and qualifications, I’m confident that I can exceed company expectations as an employee.
My previous coursework at Fairleigh Dickinson University and vast experience in the retail industry has given me a tremendous foundation for the marketing and client relations fields. Through signage/marketing campaigns, market research, and client and employee resolution I have found reacting to client needs and wants appropriately is key when successfully executed. I’m also familiar with fulfilling sales goals and target objectives through my retail management and telephone marketing experience. Direct interaction with consumers and clients has equipped me to quickly and effectively resolve client issues and complaints. In addition, I’ve been fortunate to have had the experience of representing several of some of the most successful companies by means of field promotional marketing. These new innovative marketing strategies put me in direct contact with clients in order to promote new products and services as well as inform and sell potential clients. These crucial areas are where I have attained much knowledge in consumer/client habits as well as employer expectations. My quick and creative thinking, critical decision making and multi-tasking capabilities are just a few skills that clients and employers alike have come to appreciate. I’m a firm believer in accountability, strong work ethics, and client satisfaction.
I’ve provided my resume for your review. I look forward to the opportunity to meet with you to further discuss my background and desire to work for XXXXXX. Please feel free to contact me via phone (XXX*XXX*XXXX) or via email at DerickBusiness@yahoo.com
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Derick Robinson
Hi
Good stuff in there however IMHO its far too long- needs to be punchier. For a great guide to really effective cover letters, visit
Good luck!
it is too long. Condense a little. Say the same thing with fewer words.
I believe you should always use ‘I am’ instead of I’m. also – I have – not I’ve. Your second paragraph is too lengthy, wordy. When I was reading it, I was getting lost in some areas… “I’ve been fortunate to have had the experience of representing SEVERAL OF SOME OF THE MOST…”
You sound very qualified however, good luck in your job searching.
It sounds too much like advertising. You need to make it more personal to you. Also NO contractions. That is too casual. I have done some editing to make it read better.
DO NOT mention what you did at university if you graduated more than 5 years ago. If you graduated in the last 5 years then leave it in.
I am writing to express my interest in the position of XXXXXX .
My skills include quick and creative thinking, critical decision making and multi-tasking capabilities. I am a firm believer in accountability, strong work ethics, and client satisfaction.
My coursework at Fairleigh Dickinson University and experience in the retail industry has helped me to develop a keen interest in the marketing and client relations fields.
In previous positions I have used signage, marketing campaigns, market research, as well as client and employee relationships skills to learn what is and what is not appropriate in customer relations.
I am also experienced with meeting sales deadlines and obtaining target objectives through my retail management and telephone marketing experience.
Direct interaction with consumers and clients has allowed me to quickly and effectively resolve client issues and complaints.
In addition, I’ve been fortunate to have had the experience of representing several of some of the most successful companies by means of field promotional marketing. These new innovative marketing strategies meant that I was in direct contact with clients and with potential new clients.
Please find enclosed my resume for your review. I look forward to the opportunity to meet with you to further discuss my background and desire to work for XXXXXX.
Please feel free to contact me via phone (XXX*XXX*XXXX) or via email at
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Derick Robinson